Memories Fragments – Rewriting short scenes from the 4 Alice

Summary: Since I prefer the Alice as magical girls to say the names of their attacks in French rather than in English in the original French version, here are some rewritten scenes.
Now the English attacks’ names are pretty much the same but some scenes do have some differences compared to their original counterparts.


From “4 Alice: Autistic Magical Girls,” Chapter 6: Revelations and transformations.

We are teleported into the corridor with the Alice’s rooms, and the three Traces are ready to pounce on us and kill us.

“Come on, let's use our imagination!” Says Brown.

It would seem that it is with it, plus our soul’s affinity to an element of nature, that we can attack. As in season 15 of the Pretty Preserve anime. The Alice all attack with English names, which I think is great.

“Power of the Earth…”

Brown raises her arm and extends her right hand toward the ceiling. A yellow spark appears.

“GO!”

The spark disappears then a stalactite materializes and falls on the first Trace. The magical attack crushes her, black blood spatters everywhere, and the creature disappears along with the stalactite.

<Is dead... now...>

I hear Jennifer's voice in my head.

“Water Sword Edge!” Said Blondinka.

Blue particles form and a sword of the same color appears in her right hand. It seems to be made of crystal or, at least, a transparent material. The blonde Alice uses it to cut the second Trace into shreds. Her movements with the magic blade remind me of a hack-and-slash game. Blondinka must be a bit of a gamer too. The sword disappears as soon as the soul-devouring creature dies.

There is only one Trace left to defeat.

“I can...”

“I'll take care of her!” said Kurosawa, interrupting me. “Fire Orb!”

A red spark followed by a ball of fire appears in her right hand.

“Rage On!”

The Japanese Alice squeezes it. The orb seems to explode in her hand. It reappears, trapping the Trace inside and explodes, consuming her. Then while the other Alice used their right hands to attack, I am the only left-handed Alice.

Now that the Traces are dead, we can take a breather although no one is tired. We de-transform.


From “4 Alice: Autistic Magical Girls,” Chapter 7: Homecoming.

“Let's destroy this crystal and go home!” I said in a determined tone. “Combined attack!” I raise my left hand upward. “Wind Power!” A green glow forms in my hand.

“Yes!” said Alice Blondinka. She raised her right hand upward. “Water Power!” A blue glow forms in her hand.

“Earth Power!” Say Alice Brown. She also raises her right hand. A yellow glow forms in her hand.

“Fire Power!” Say Alice Kurosawa. She raises her right hand. A red glow forms in her hand.

“RELEASE!” We all scream together, reaching out our hands toward the crystal.

Colored rays shoot out from the glow of our hands. They touch the crystal. It explodes and I find myself dazzled by a bright white light.


From “Lorange's powers upon wind”.

Before facing the zombie bird, I, Alice Lorange, look up at the sky again and wink for Mia, the author.

“Come on, Breeze...!”

A green spark followed by a greenish whip appears in my hand.

“…Whip!”

It whips the zombie several times before disappearing. The monster is wounded but far from being in mortal danger.

“Aerial Saw!”

A round green saw blade made of cutting air materializes in midair. It flies toward the zombie to cut off its head, but the monster avoids it without flying away.

“AHHH!” I screamed in frustration. “SOUND ARIA!”

Two semi-transparent speakers, round in shape and greenish in color, appear in the air. They cause a powerful sound vibration that explodes the zombie bird. I see its organs flying everywhere. The speakers then disappear.

[Mini Bonus Scenes]

Alice Blondinka, transformed into a magical girl, sees trash on a beach and objects floating in the water. It disgusts her.

“Water Vortex!” She said, reaching her right hand toward the ocean.

A blue vortex appears, sucks up the trash on the sand and into the water, then disappears. The Russian Alice smiles.

***

Alice Brown, transformed into a magical girl, sees a large pothole on a road. She thinks she can help.

“Come on.” She raises her right hand toward the sky. “Mega Rock!”

A huge rock appeared in the air. It fell from the sky and blocked the pothole.

“Problem solved!”

***

Alice Kurosawa, transformed into a magical girl, watches fireworks. Unfortunately, some of the flares have taken off incorrectly and are heading towards people.

“NO!” she said. “Bow!”

A magical red bow appears in her hand.

She points an arrow at the flares.

“Fire Arrows…!”

She releases the arrow and it multiplies.

“RAIN!”

This volley of red arrows, imbued with the fire element, strikes the flares, causing them to explode. Kurosawa sighs with relief.


From “Autistic Magical Girls: Roses’ World”, chapiter 4: Orcs / Battle.

The four orcs laugh. Magical Calida tells us to get ready for battle. The orcs run towards us but we are fast.

“FIRE FURY!” Calida shouts while reaching out her right hand toward an orc. 

A red spark appeared in her hand then a row of flames rushed at an orc. He had to duck down in the tall grass to avoid them.

“MEGA ROCK!” Yell Magical Petra while raising her right hand toward the sky.

A yellow spark appeared in her hand then a large rock appeared and fell from the sky. Two other orcs barely managed to avoid being crushed.

“WATER SPLASH!” Magical Dayla screams while extending his right hand toward the last orc.

A blue spark appears in her hand and a stream of water pushes the last orc away.

"You are witches, like the Black Roses King!" Exclaims an orc. "No matter. He gave us powers in exchange for loyalty."

“BREEZE WHIP!” I yell.

A green spark followed by a greenish whip appears in my hand. I, Magical Aella, am about to whip an orc when the orc slams his axe to the ground. The earth begins to shake and we find ourselves on the soil. The whip disappears from my hand. The orcs want to pounce on us to tackle us to the ground, but we are faster. We are already up and ready to give them a beating.

“Arial Saw.” I say.

A round, green saw made of cutting air appears in the air. It slices an orc into bloody pieces.

“O Earth, Pierce And Bury Him!” Says Petra.

The earth opens under another orc, stuffs him with spikes, and drags him into the abyss before closing again.

“Bow!” Calida said in a loud voice.

A magical red bow appears. She grabbed it.

“And Fire Arrow!” said the red magical girl.

She shoots a magic flaming arrow at the third orc's head. The orc's head explodes, spraying blood and flesh.

“Spicky Water Vortex!” Says Dayla.  

A blue vortex with razor blades appears to carry away the last orc while leaving a blood puddle behind. The vortex disappears.

We can rest easy. The orcs are gone.


From “Autistic Magical Girls: Roses’ World”, chapiter 5: Queen Rosalind / The Servant.

The servant shrieks as black rose stems, without thorns, grab her and lift her into the air.

"LET HER GO!"  Angry Magical Petra screams. “Power of the Earth…”

She raises her arm and extends her right hand toward the ceiling. A yellow spark appears.

“GO!”

The spark disappears, then a stalactite appears and falls on a part of the stems, freeing the female servant.


From “Autistic Magical Girls: Roses’ World”, chapiter 6: Black Roses Kingdom / King Rosen.

We move forward cautiously and the roses begin to stir. Their flexible stems rise up.

“They want to capture us, just like with the servant lady.” Says Dayla.

“That's not going to happen,” said Calida. “Bow!” Her red bow appears. “FIRE ARROW RAIN!”

Magical Calida shoots a magic arrow into the sky. A shower of flaming arrows rains down on the black rose stems.

***

We keep running but the black roses don't give up. Their stems try to grab us. They manage to catch Magical Petra but I free her with Sound Aria. We reach the castle and quickly go inside.


From “Autistic Magical Girls: Roses’ World” chapiter 7: Magical Traces / The World Is Saved.

The Traces, having taken over their host bodies, confront King Rosen with their powers over darkness or rather with imagination and several darkness-type attacks. Rosen seems to have the upper hand but his powers cannot hold out for long against the Traces.

“Dark Wand!” Say Magical Heather and a magic wand with a black star appears in her hand. “STAR STORM!”

A storm of black stars bursts forth from the star on her magic wand and goes to hurt Rosen.

“Dark Abyss…” Dis Magical Lisa.

The ground turns purple under Rosen's feet.

“Tentacles, COME!”

Tentacles attack the evil king before disappearing.

“O Melodious Despair, RESOUND!” Says Magical Jennifer.

Evil music is heard and Rosen covers his ears. This doesn't stop them from bleeding.

“End Is Near, NOW!” Says Magical Aya.

A blast of evil energy knocks Rosen down. He doesn’t get up but he’s still alive.

Magical Heather becomes me. Magical Lisa becomes Magical Dayla. Magical Jennifer becomes Magical Petra. Magical Aya becomes Magical Calida. Now that we have control over our bodies again, we can finish Rosen off.

“No holding back now!” I say. “Wind Power!” I raise my left hand toward the sky. A green glow forms in my hand.

“Water Power!” Say Magical Dayla. She raises her right hand toward the sky. A blue glow forms in her hand.

“Earth Power!” Say Magical Petra. She raises her right hand toward the sky. A yellow glow forms in her hand.

“Fire Power!” Say Magical Calida. She raises her right hand toward the sky. A red glow forms in her hand.

“RELEASE!” We say this all at once while lowering and stretching out our hands toward Rosen.

Colorful rays shoot out from the glow of our hands, striking the evil king and blowing him apart. Calida sees his head fly through the air before disappearing along with the pieces of his corpse.


From “Autistic Magical Girls: Short Battles”.

(Since it's a short story, I'll post it in its entirety.)

I'm Alice Lorange. Autistic. Transformed into Magical Aella, I face a giant.

<Aella!> My Trace, Heather, says mentally to alert me.

“I know!” I raise both arms in the air. “Aerial Saw…”

A round, green saw blade, made of cutting air, materializes. I lower my arms abruptly.

DOUBLE!”

It splits in two and they cut the flesh from the giant's ankles but without cutting off his feet.

“It's not enough! Aerial Saw Storm!”

Several aerial saws appear and cut deeper and deeper into the flesh of the giant's ankles. It's a new attack. I scream with joy as his feet come off and the giant falls to the ground.

“Let's get it over with! GIANT SOUND ARIA!”

Two giant semi-transparent speakers, round in shape and greenish in color, appear in the air. They cause a powerful sound vibration that blows up the giant. I find myself covered in blood and guts.

“YUCK!” I say, shaking myself, causing the guts to fall out, but I'm still covered in blood.

Heather congratulates me. In the end, I didn't have to use Breeze Whip.

***

I'm Alice Blondinka. Autistic. Transformed into Magical Dayla, I face a giant bat who must have been a vampire turned into a bat.

“Water Splash!” I said, extending my right hand toward the enemy.

A jet of water appears and drives the giant bat away from me.

“Water Vortex!” This time I reached my hand toward the sky.

A water vortex appears but fails to take the creature away. I made it disappear.

“Spicky Water Vortex!”

A blue, razor-bladed vortex appears, but it fails to carry away and eliminate the giant bat. I make it disappear. I grunt in frustration. 

<Use your sword.> My Trace, Lisa, suggest.

“Ok. Water Sword Edge!”

A blue sword appears in my right hand. It seems to be made of crystal or at least some kind of transparent material. I could attack the creature with my sword. Instead, I concentrate. It's time to create a new attack.

“Ice of Sorrow…”

The sword glows and its blade is covered in ice. I let out a scream as I swung my sword in the creature's direction.

"RELEASE!"

A powerful ice attack emerges from the sword's blade and hits the bat, freezing it. After all, I have control over water and ice is a form of water. Smiling, I cut up the frozen giant bat, killing it while leaving blood behind. Lisa congratulates me on my victory.

***

I'm Alice Brown. Autistic. Transformed into Magical Petra, I face fast-moving creatures that look like cats, but cats with the head of a rat.

“Power of the Earth, Go!”

I raise my arm and stretch my right hand toward the sky. An stalactite appears and falls but does not touch any cat-rats.

“Mega Rock!”

A large rock falls from the sky. The rat-cats easily avoid it.

“My attacks are too slow!” I said in a panic.

<No. Try something else.> Says my Trace Jennifer.

“Okay. O Earth, Pierce And Bury Them!”

The earth opens up beneath several rat-cats, impales them with spikes, and drags them into the abyss before closing up again. Others remain.

“Good. It seems I have to create new attacks with my imagination. Let's see...”

After all, our powers come from it and our Soul Affinity.

I raise both arms to the sky.

“Rock Storm…”

Then I hold them out to the rat-cats.

“SPREAD!”

Tons of rocks rise from the ground and hurtle toward the creatures. No matter how fast they are, they’re all crushed by the stones. There is blood everywhere. I find it disgusting and Jennifer congratulates me.

***

I'm Alice Kurosawa. Autistic. Transformed into Magical Calida, I face a tentacled monster. Aya, my Trace, reassures me.

<This monster can't do anything to you!>

“I know. I wasn't thinking of manga for adults at all! Fire Orb!”

A fire orb appears in my right hand.

“Rage On!”

I squeeze it in my hand. The orb seems to explode. It reappears, trapping the tentacled monster inside and explodes. This hurts the monster but nothing too serious.

“Fire Fury!”

A row of flames engulfs the tentacled monster. The creature struggles and breaks free from the flames. It’s not dead but it is not strong either.

“Bow!”

My red bow appears. It seems to be made of crystal or at least a material that looks like crystal. I grab it.

“Fire Arrow.”

I shoot a flaming arrow at the monster. The monster absorbs it without hesitation.

“That should finish you off.” I aim an arrow at the tentacled monster. “Fire Arrow...!” I release the arrow and it multiplies. “RAIN!”

A shower of flaming arrows is released. The creature cannot absorb them all and dies. The tentacled monster leaves no blood behind. Just a kind of slimy jelly. Aya congratulates me on my victory.


Author's notes: There you go. I don't see the need to rewrite the short scenes from the crossover stories with the Sailor Guardians since the Sailors' attacks are all in English.



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